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Comments from Rough publish-This is a good start, Tiffany. Pros: – You do a great

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Comments from Rough publish-This is a good start, Tiffany. Pros: – You do a great job of logos and making your case in a scientific and logical way. – You do well giving information in a clear and understandable way. Some things to work on: – There really is no introduction or conclusion. You sort of start right into your first point and end with your last point. I’d like to see a first paragraph explaining what you’re going to be talking about and the case you’ll be making. Likewise, a concluding paragraph should recap the essay. – There really should be a few more points (this is a three-page essay). Right now you have three paragraphs talking about proteins and then a final paragraph about amino acids and more about protein. Find some examples and points that aren’t centered around protein. – You do a great job of logos and there’s some ethos when you cite the outside source. There isn’t any pathos, which I know is difficult in an essay like this one. Try to include a personal story (something to make the reader feel a part of the story), it doesn’t have to be sad or sappy, but something to engage the reader. Looking forward to the finished product! ( i have attach rough publish below, please look at comments from intructor about paper and rewrite in final copy.) Thank you!

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